Monday, May 07, 2007

In READ Magazine's pirate issue (yar), we asked you to write the conclusion to a story called The Pirate's Life For Me. To read the first part of that story, click here. To read Deb Chadwick's conclusion... keep reading.

  

The Pirate's Life For Me (Part II)

- Deb Chadwick, Grade 11

I have been on this boat for the past 8 months and I have learned a lot: how to sword fight, rob ships, and gain the trust and respect from all of the other pirates. The one thing that I love the most is my new sword. From the very moment I held it, I knew that it was mine.

Uncle Petey has taught me well and I hope I've made him very proud. One day, Uncle Petey had been looking for Black Island, a dangerous island where the dead wander. He had said that a lost but very valuable treasure could be found there, but the treasure was protected by some kind of a monster. When the island was near, Uncle Petey and I lowered the smaller boat into the water and began to row toward the island.

 

Uncle Petey seemed scared as we entered the cave. The closer we got to the treasure the colder we became. We entered a chamber that was large and damp. Water was dripping from the ceiling. As we got closer to the treasure we saw the monster. She was half-woman, half-snake, and she had a very long tail.

 

Uncle Petey told me to get the gold while he distracted her, but I was the only one to get out of the cave alive. When I got back to the ship, I told everyone what had happened. The next day we had Petey's funeral. We filled a coffin with all of Petey's belongings and set it off to sea on fire. When it was over, all the other pirates decided that I should become the new captain because of my bravery. It's been 3 years since we lost Petey but I promised everyone that I would be just as good of a pirate as he was.


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Bryon    Posted by
Bryon
on 5/7/2007
3:26 PM
5/8/2007 7:57:51 AM (Eastern Daylight Time, UTC-04:00)
Hay, good job on winning. Your story was amazing!
5/8/2007 7:58:20 AM (Eastern Daylight Time, UTC-04:00)
Good job Deb, loved your story. You used describing words very well, and the ending was perfect.
Heather from Knolls
5/8/2007 7:58:27 AM (Eastern Daylight Time, UTC-04:00)
Deb, I really liked how you used alot of words to describe your story. I liked it alot.
-Brinley
5/8/2007 7:59:24 AM (Eastern Daylight Time, UTC-04:00)
Congrats!
Liked your story! It was very interesting and exciting.
What I liked the most was the ending. It was unpredictable.
Congrats again!
5/8/2007 8:09:22 AM (Eastern Daylight Time, UTC-04:00)
Hey
Nice job with the story. You should be a writer!


5/8/2007 8:10:56 AM (Eastern Daylight Time, UTC-04:00)
Hey Deb
You did a marvelous job on this story. I liked the ending. It was so descriptive, you should be very proud of yourself and maybe you should do this more often. Great ideas for the story!
5/8/2007 10:19:11 AM (Eastern Daylight Time, UTC-04:00)
hey!

i know how you feel i lost 1 of my alligators! i was so very very very sad!





thanks Xoxoxoxoxoxo ~chloe~ xoxoxoxoxox
5/8/2007 11:33:55 AM (Eastern Daylight Time, UTC-04:00)
Congratulations Deb!!

You wrote a great ending to a great story!!

I enjoyed reading it.
Ms. D
5/8/2007 1:13:44 PM (Eastern Daylight Time, UTC-04:00)
Impressive job, Deb! I, too, enjoyed all the detail!
5/8/2007 2:37:13 PM (Eastern Daylight Time, UTC-04:00)
WOW! I REALLY enjoyed this story! Keep up the MARVELOUS work!
5/8/2007 9:25:59 PM (Eastern Daylight Time, UTC-04:00)
Congratulations! I am so proud of you!
5/9/2007 9:19:46 AM (Eastern Daylight Time, UTC-04:00)
Yo, nice job. You should really try to write some more stories like that.
5/9/2007 9:20:25 AM (Eastern Daylight Time, UTC-04:00)
Nice job on your story.
5/21/2007 7:56:56 PM (Eastern Daylight Time, UTC-04:00)
no offense but there were better ones out there. like the one were keith finds himself back in bed with the stupid clowns.

Never the less it was still better than anything i could EVER do.

lol
Shawn
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