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Saturday, January 21, 2006

Yo Squirrel, I think that you are wicked sweet. For
last week I tried to steal your nuts so prized and
you handed me a stunning defeat. Yo Squirrel, at
first I thought you were dead. But I got you all riled
and you started going wild and jumped right onto
my head. Yo Squirrel, for me it started as a joke.
But you proved rather hostile and now I'm in the
hospital, straining just to reach my Coke. But Yo
Squirrel, I still think that you're wicked sweet.

by Scott M, Grade 7

Posted by
StudentWriter
on 1/21/2006
11:28 AM

1/21/2006 12:21:06 PM (Eastern Standard Time, UTC-05:00)

Yo Scott!

That squirrel of yours is mad crazy! I'm glad you could forgive him after he landed you in the hospital.

Watch your back when you get out.

Bryon

1/22/2006 8:35:50 PM (Eastern Standard Time, UTC-05:00)

I don't like this poem...or rap. Whatever you call it. I think the wording is lousy.

Betha.

Betha M.

1/24/2006 10:15:38 PM (Eastern Standard Time, UTC-05:00)

ugh... such negativity from Betha. Scott, write what you feel and don't listen to people who say you do it "wrong."

craig

1/25/2006 9:10:52 AM (Eastern Standard Time, UTC-05:00)

Excuse me Craig, but if he can write what he feels so can I. I can think whatever i want about this poem and post it. It just so happens i dont like this poem. It's not a big deal.

Betha

Betha

1/25/2006 9:53:33 AM (Eastern Standard Time, UTC-05:00)

Betha is entitled not to like the poem. After all, tastes differ and some people like rap and others don't. But, there is such a thing as "constructive criticism" and here, at WORD, we strongly believe in it. Basically, CC is the process of offering thoughtful and well-argued opinions about the work of others. It is usually provided in a friendly tone and offers positive and negative feedback. It doesn't make the recepients feel bad - but helps them reexamine their work(s) with an open mind.
Betha, instead of telling Scott, "I don't like this poem ... or rap. Whatever you call it, I think the wording is lousy" you could have said:
"This poem is not really my cup of tea. Maybe it's because I'm not a big fan of rap. If I were writing this poem, I would have used some more descriptive words. But I liked the image of the squirrel jumping on your head."
Notice how the tone is different - more sympathetic - and that you're providing one piece of positive feedback and one specific suggestion for revision.

sandhya

2/3/2006 3:13:53 PM (Eastern Standard Time, UTC-05:00)

Rogue: Wow, you had me rollin'...

lizzie: that was freakin' hilarious to read man!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Rogue: Keep it up! You Rock.

<3-Rogue & Lizzie Roo

Rogue & Lizzie Roo

3/29/2006 11:47:20 AM (Eastern Daylight Time, UTC-04:00)

i liked your poem because it is a very comical type of writing.I think you have a very good personality. keep up the good work and good luck on many more writings.

nichelle

3/31/2006 11:09:28 AM (Eastern Daylight Time, UTC-04:00)

Yo Squirrels are crazy wit' it, you can't mess wit' them

jake

3/31/2006 11:11:01 AM (Eastern Daylight Time, UTC-04:00)

I think that your poem was funny,but did that really happen?

jay

4/13/2006 11:03:22 AM (Eastern Daylight Time, UTC-04:00)

" YO Squirrel"
I liked it, but they kept on saying "yo squirrel". I also liked because I like squirrels. They are small,furry,and cute.

adama

11/6/2006 11:34:19 AM (Eastern Standard Time, UTC-05:00)

I dont know you but I love that poem!! It was flippin' sweet!

Marih Powe

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