Friday, February 03, 2006

Poem by Carol Kuruvilla, Grade 11

the river creaks through ancient city gates
falling in drops that kiss the dust
on the sun streaked marble

plains of my face that
hate the way you look at me as
if I hurt you with this white morning

lie on the water while the gondola
swings softly with the current
of splintered, unsteady ocean

waves that would shatter and curse the moment
I broke the light with my tempest
so strong I don't hate

you touch the sleeping water
and drown in the echoes of silence
that cry between our bridge of sighs


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StudentWriter    Posted by
StudentWriter
on 2/3/2006
10:02 AM
2/3/2006 6:34:00 PM (Eastern Standard Time, UTC-05:00)
Its better than I can do!
Andrea
3/11/2006 2:12:20 PM (Eastern Standard Time, UTC-05:00)
Nice work. Keep it up.

4/13/2006 10:57:16 AM (Eastern Daylight Time, UTC-04:00)
why did you write about rivers and creeks?
12/10/2006 3:23:36 PM (Eastern Standard Time, UTC-05:00)
Nice.

Keep it up.

-JaKundiz
12/15/2008 10:06:54 PM (Eastern Standard Time, UTC-05:00)
This is such a beautiful poem-- I love it. I like how Venezia has no particular rhyme scheme, and it portrays many things nicely. Well done, and keep up the good work :)
poet_girl_16
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